Okay, so i'm gonna post some of what i've written, this is mostly off the top of my head story writing, and i would appreciate any and all critisism. Reply
P.S. this is fantasy writing, the protagonist is a pixie. Reply
Desca pulled back the silk curtain that covered the entrance to her small home, and jumped in fright at the sight of a Gaurdian sitting by the fireplace. Desca's small blue butterfly wings beat in time with her heart, lifting her slight frame and sending a draft of cool night air across the room and over the Gaurdian's face. Reply
He awoke and saw Desca in the doorway, he was an aging brownie with a large fatherly face, his balding head and white beard reminded her of the statues in Avelion of San Di Closs the generous, or as he was more commonly known San Di Closs the stupid, the elf king who created the Sanday holiday in 1826 PC. Reply
The Gaurdian smiled at her Gerentide rosebud, I am Tillerbee, i'm here to deliver a message of good tidings.
Tillerbee stood, smiling even wider, he handed her a folded sheet of paper with the gaurdian seal stamped in wax upon it.
Desca knew that seal could mean only two things, and she dreaded them both. Reply
With a feeling of despair she broke the wax and unfolded the paper. Reply
Sure enough the first line read 'Dear Desca Arkinan, let me be the first to congradulate you on your upcoming marriage to..." Desca didn't even bother to read who it was she had been promised to, it would be some idiot ugly man she had never met, with no care for anyone but himself, Desca felt sick at the thought, she half sat half fell into a chair. Reply
That's all i've written so far, what do ya think? Reply
Okay, heres some more, i think this bit needs a little more work (i've been writing this in a notebook and copying it onto here. Reply
Several hours later Desca's mind was made up and her bag was packed, it contained only the barest essential's because she planned to fly. Too heavy and it would wear her down in minutes. Reply
Desca double checked that she had packed everything, her bag was specially designed and constructed for the Pixie body, thin enough to fit between her wings, and big enough to hold days worth of clothes and food. Reply
Desca took one last look around the place that had been her home for three years, it was closed now, tight as a clamshell around her precious memories. Reply
She pulled the heavy wooden door into place behind her as she stepped out, and muttered a powerful locking spell under her breath, a cool blue glow spread across the door, working tendrils of blue mist into the cracks and crannies of her abode, it encompassed the whole house, and glowed like a firefly for a minute, then vanished into the structure. Desca smiled in satisfaction, now only she would be able to reopen it, if she ever came back. Reply
Nothing could hold her now, she flicked her wings back and forth a few times to warm up, then with a light fluttering she was off. A laugh bubbled from inside as she pictured the face of her promised, though she had never met him she he would be a gnolish man with a hideous face born of generations of inbreeding. In short, the sort of man who would have to ask the Gaurdians to find him a promise. Reply
By dawn the next day she was huddled asleep in a tree only ten kilometers distant, her freezing wings spread over her body like a tent, making her look like an overlarge butterfly. Desca shivered in the crisp spring air, her teeth chattered a staccato beat that rose and fell with the shivers up and down her back. Reply
Her sleep was so deep she didn't hear the quick thump-thump of grapples biting into the branch a few feet away, or the harsh rasping of gnome's voice shouting instructions at one another. Reply
Duh-duh-duh-dum Suspense! lol, anyway, comments, suggestions, anything, Reply
Yay, i get my own cheerleader's! Reply
Desca's eyes snapped open, it was warm now, too warm on her frost bitten skin, icy hot daggers rode up her back and sides, she struggled against a strong weight that pressed down on her shoulder's and wings. Reply
But worse than that was a burning sensation in her wrists and ankles, it seared into Desca's mind like a red-hot poker through butter, it blanketed her senses in a fog of pain. Reply
All that Desca saw, before a sharp kick in the back of her head knocked her back unconcious, was a raging bonfire and, huddled beside it, a bundle of rags that just might have been a person. Reply
The pain was muted now, like gobs of spider silk had been stuffed around her senses. Deesca moved her groggy head to see her left side, she saw the thick rope holding down her wing, it stretched over her back and tied down again on the other side, so tight she could hardly breath. Reply
The source of that burning pain was apparent now, a heavy iron manacle was attached to each wrist and ankle, chaining her to the floor, and slowly but inexorably, the iron was being absorbed through her skin and into her blood, and she knew what it meant, she would die soon if she didn't get help. Reply
The effects of iron poisoning spread quickly through a fae's body, her limbs already felt numb, pretty soon her vision would fail, after that it would be a matter of hours before her wings deattached and crumbled to dust. Reply
A deep voice next to her ear Desentida fair one, i will help you, remain still.
a rasping noise began, and Desca felt the rope vibrate against her back. The owner of the voice was cutting through the ropes, setting her free once more. Reply
With a snap the rope broke and Desca pushed herself up to her knees, her muscles protested at this further abuse, already the iron was infusing her tissue with weakness and numbness, her skin wash ash grey. She knew she had little hope to see dawn the next day. Reply
Desca's rescuer was standing between her and the firelight, all she could see was his ragged outline against the dying flames, but the sight of two sharply pointed ears reassured her of his good intentions, no fae would hurt another in this situation. Reply
He turned away for a second, and in that instant she recognized him as the pile of rags she had seen before Reply
I'm sorta stuck here, I have a few ideas but no concrete scenes. might take a while to figure out, please be patient. and any suggestions are welcome. Reply
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